The soft, warm breeze blew my hair back and forth. My toes wiggled around in the rough, warm sand. The sunset was beautiful with pastel pinks and oranges streak covering the sky. I closed my eyes and took in the salty sea air. Then I slowly exhaled before opening my eyes. The gulls screeched as they glided above Long Island Sound. The waves gently swam back and forth, as if playing keep away. The tide would come in soon, and I would have to leave. But for the moment, I was on the beach. For the moment, I had come home.
And plus, I said that you had gramatical and punctual errors.jlsprague2 wrote:I am describing the colors as pastels.qelo wrote:U tell me i have bad grammar when i write stories? The scentance about the pastels, read it over.
\Author101 wrote:I love it! Snippets are fine if you don't feel comfortable with writing whole stories on here. Jared spoke to me about what you told him. Thank you for posting! Please continue! I think that it is amazing! -Author101
Thank you so much! I haven't really showed any of my friends what I write or how I write so thank you for your great feedback! And I will definitely post more stories, and hopefully longer ones.
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