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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 8:51 pm

The soft, warm breeze blew my hair back and forth. My toes wiggled around in the rough, warm sand. The sunset was beautiful with pastel pinks and oranges streak covering the sky. I closed my eyes and took in the salty sea air. Then I slowly exhaled before opening my eyes. The gulls screeched as they glided above Long Island Sound. The waves gently swam back and forth, as if playing keep away. The tide would come in soon, and I would have to leave. But for the moment, I was on the beach. For the moment, I had come home.

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Post  qelo on Sat Apr 21, 2012 8:57 pm

U tell me i have bad grammar when i write stories? The scentance about the pastels, read it over.

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 8:59 pm

qelo wrote:U tell me i have bad grammar when i write stories? The scentance about the pastels, read it over.
I am describing the colors as pastels.

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 9:04 pm

jlsprague2 wrote:
qelo wrote:U tell me i have bad grammar when i write stories? The scentance about the pastels, read it over.
I am describing the colors as pastels.
And plus, I said that you had gramatical and punctual errors.

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So much detail!!

Post  Author101 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 9:29 pm

I love it! Snippets are fine if you don't feel comfortable with writing whole stories on here. Jared spoke to me about what you told him. Thank you for posting! Please continue! I think that it is amazing! -Author101

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:05 pm

Author101 wrote:I love it! Snippets are fine if you don't feel comfortable with writing whole stories on here. Jared spoke to me about what you told him. Thank you for posting! Please continue! I think that it is amazing! -Author101
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Thank you so much! I haven't really showed any of my friends what I write or how I write so thank you for your great feedback! And I will definitely post more stories, and hopefully longer ones.
Thanks
Jesse

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Post  qelo on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:10 pm

You need a profile picture on here j

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:15 pm

qelo wrote:You need a profile picture on here j
How do I do that?

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Post  qelo on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:16 pm

Click the profile button at the top and then there will be an avatar button

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Post  qelo on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:20 pm

Plus you don't have to quote everything, you can press the reply button. It's easyer to talk in te chat room because the newest post is at the top

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:21 pm

omg this is so much easier. . . . n i posted my pic.

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Post  qelo on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:23 pm

Yea I built the website

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:28 pm

This is ur website? oh well.
AOOOOOOH!!! you meant the OTHER website. Ohwell.
Hey you should telll Bailey about this site though. She'd love it.
She wants to be a writer, too, you know.

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Post  qelo on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:31 pm

No I built both. I helped author with this one.

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:33 pm

I'm sorry jared, but are you purposely using bad grammar to bug me?

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No problem!

Post  Author101 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:35 pm

You deserve great feedback! I think you should show your friends. They would definitely like your stories! Also, tell them about the website, and they can write, too!

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:36 pm

Thank you so much! I will!

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Post  qelo on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:38 pm

jlsprague2 wrote:I'm sorry jared, but are you purposely using bad grammar to bug me?
yes Twisted Evil

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:39 pm

hahaha. lol!

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Post  qelo on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:40 pm

Also lease don't use my real name on here it's not secure like facebook

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:43 pm

no one knows ur last name.
idrc if you use mine. No one using this site knows who I am
(but u n maybe Author101. I'm friends with her on fb.)
I don't even live anywhere near u guys.

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:44 pm

scratch that. dont use my real name pls.

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:46 pm

now stop replying to this and go read my other story (please)

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Post  Author101 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:49 pm

Good! Well, I'll probably be on tomorrow, but for now ima hit the sack! Sooo tired Smile Bye Jesse and qelo!

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 10:50 pm

If he were to spell it correctly, it should say "quelo"

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