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Home Sweet Home

Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 7:51 pm

The soft, warm breeze blew my hair back and forth. My toes wiggled around in the rough, warm sand. The sunset was beautiful with pastel pinks and oranges streak covering the sky. I closed my eyes and took in the salty sea air. Then I slowly exhaled before opening my eyes. The gulls screeched as they glided above Long Island Sound. The waves gently swam back and forth, as if playing keep away. The tide would come in soon, and I would have to leave. But for the moment, I was on the beach. For the moment, I had come home.

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Post  qelo on Sat Apr 21, 2012 7:57 pm

U tell me i have bad grammar when i write stories? The scentance about the pastels, read it over.

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 7:59 pm

qelo wrote:U tell me i have bad grammar when i write stories? The scentance about the pastels, read it over.
I am describing the colors as pastels.

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 8:04 pm

jlsprague2 wrote:
qelo wrote:U tell me i have bad grammar when i write stories? The scentance about the pastels, read it over.
I am describing the colors as pastels.
And plus, I said that you had gramatical and punctual errors.

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So much detail!!

Post  Author101 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 8:29 pm

I love it! Snippets are fine if you don't feel comfortable with writing whole stories on here. Jared spoke to me about what you told him. Thank you for posting! Please continue! I think that it is amazing! -Author101

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 9:05 pm

Author101 wrote:I love it! Snippets are fine if you don't feel comfortable with writing whole stories on here. Jared spoke to me about what you told him. Thank you for posting! Please continue! I think that it is amazing! -Author101
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Thank you so much! I haven't really showed any of my friends what I write or how I write so thank you for your great feedback! And I will definitely post more stories, and hopefully longer ones.
Thanks
Jesse

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Post  qelo on Sat Apr 21, 2012 9:10 pm

You need a profile picture on here j

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 9:15 pm

qelo wrote:You need a profile picture on here j
How do I do that?

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Post  qelo on Sat Apr 21, 2012 9:16 pm

Click the profile button at the top and then there will be an avatar button

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Post  qelo on Sat Apr 21, 2012 9:20 pm

Plus you don't have to quote everything, you can press the reply button. It's easyer to talk in te chat room because the newest post is at the top

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 9:21 pm

omg this is so much easier. . . . n i posted my pic.

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Post  qelo on Sat Apr 21, 2012 9:23 pm

Yea I built the website

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 9:28 pm

This is ur website? oh well.
AOOOOOOH!!! you meant the OTHER website. Ohwell.
Hey you should telll Bailey about this site though. She'd love it.
She wants to be a writer, too, you know.

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Post  qelo on Sat Apr 21, 2012 9:31 pm

No I built both. I helped author with this one.

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Post  jlsprague2 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 9:33 pm

I'm sorry jared, but are you purposely using bad grammar to bug me?

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